This was was abandoned a few years sgo

[JennieJo]

but I do fancy giving it another chance To many mistakes I haven't got the pastel skills to fix. So, I'm thinking of an edit like the second chance. Any chance for it?

 

[Donna T]

Wow what a strong piece! What mistakes do you mean, Jennie? I love the dramatic background and the way it sets off the figure.

 

[PaintBoss]

There’s always a chance for it, especially when you have fresh eyes and there’s been some time away from the piece!

 

[Artyczar]

I see all its potential. It's right there.

 

[JennieJo]

Wow what a strong piece! What mistakes do you mean, Jennie? I love the dramatic background and the way it sets off the figure.

Thanks Donna, I don't like the hands, shadows around face and seat, they're just not sitting well with me. And I haven't quite figured out what I'm doing with the background. .

 

[Donna T]

Jennie, I’m wondering how this would look if you made the background around his head darker on both sides of the painting. I think it might make it look like he’s emerging from darkness into the light if you extended the black shadow shapes. I like the bright yellow area on his left side but it might be drawing too much attention. His right hand might just need a few dark accents between the fingers to define them. I hope you don’t mind my thoughts and I know you can always try out changes digitally to see what feels right.

 

[JennieJo]

Jennie, I’m wondering how this would look if you made the background around his head darker on both sides of the painting. I think it might make it look like he’s emerging from darkness into the light if you extended the black shadow shapes. I like the bright yellow area on his left side but it might be drawing too much attention. His right hand might just need a few dark accents between the fingers to define them. I hope you don’t mind my thoughts and I know you can always try out changes digitally to see what feels right.

Mind your thoughts. Never. Many thanks for them. I have worked on the hands, they're 'better', not sure if they're 'well' yet. I love the idea of more shadow, and totally agree with the yellow. I'll have to do it again somewhere else. It just takes over here.

 

[MurrayG]

I really like the original, warts and all... except I don¨t see any warts. Its a powerful moody piece and things such as hands and anatomical detail do not really enter into the expressive interpretation. Well done.

 

[JennieJo]

I really like the original, warts and all... except I don¨t see any warts. Its a powerful moody piece and things such as hands and anatomical detail do not really enter into the expressive interpretation. Well done.

Many thanks Murray. That's what I was going for, in the beginning. I guess I'll just have to do more in the same vein, to get more confident.